Feedback Unit 2 (referring to Unit 1 material)
Blog review for Elderly females and physical body
The elements for this unit have been covered by your group. The heading and subheadings of this portion of the website are appropriate for the information that is being shared. There are enough pictures and videos to support the information in this section. The elements in this section are clear and easy to follow for the viewer. I did not see any grammatical errors in this section. I really like how you guys included pictures that covered different areas of the body explaining how each part changes during aging. One of your pictures lists body functions and compares each area so that we can understand how it is different in both women and men. This was a great picture because it allowed me to better retain the information because it was neatly organized. It is also easier for some individuals to have visuals instead of reading information in paragraph. For me it is so much easier to retain information if I have a picture to go with it. Also, the colors separating the information was also useful. The only suggestion I have is to maybe write out the term instead of abbreviating since some of the people who look at our website might not understand what the abbreviation is referring to such as right before your last picture it says “AF”. I actually do not know if you were referring to a medical diagnosis or you meant to write A-Fib. Other than that everything looks great to me!
Posting this for group 4 members on behalf of Sterling Patton (because we still have a few technology hurdles to clear):
ReplyDeleteGroup 4 - Elder Years
Blog Reflection – “Physical Female Body (elder years)”
Hi Group, 4,
Congratulations to you all for creating such a comprehensive and informative site about the physical female body in the elderly years. The website is visually appealing, easy to read, and suitable for audiences of all ages. From the moment of initial arrival at the site, the main title heading, together with the image of the three elderly ladies, creates a welcoming, warm, and fuzzy feeling; this is one of the site's eye-catching features highlighted earlier. This image perfectly captures the message that aging can be enjoyable, satisfying, and fulfilling rather than a dreadful phase of life. Furthermore, I like the charts on the website because they offer an abundance of visual appeal while also being valuable and pertinent to your overall topic. The YouTube video explaining the typical aging process helps set the tone for what to expect as forthcoming and was an appropriate length of time; neither excessively lengthy nor too brief, however sufficient for the audience to grasp the underlying concept. Likewise, the TedTalk video, which I consider a "fan favorite," I could not stop watching it until the end. This video includes super cool information surrounding various perspectives on the definition of aging and was a fantastic find on your part! Overall, the sequential manner in which the two videos are featured is genius, as one builds up to the next!
On the contrary, like with every project endeavor, there is always room for improvement. As a result, this is my attempt to bring to your attention a few ideas that may be worth considering. My initial thought regarding the first subheading, physical distinctions between females and males, is that this title may be misleading to the audience. More specifically, I expected this subsection to discuss the differences between the two genders; instead, the content seems to be more of an exclusive overview of the physical changes that females experience at various stages of life, with little mention of identifying the uniquely different characteristics in males. A possible proposal would be to rename this subheading title to better align with this subsection's content. Second, I recommend reviewing the reference list, given that some feature a blue hyperlink to the sources while others do not, although links are provided for many of the sources. One way to rectify these inconsistencies is to update all references to include a blue hyperlink or remove the hyperlink from all references listed. The website portrays considerable dedication and effort while requiring merely a few revisions! Great job!